Thread:XZonafer/@comment-32520467-20181114031425/@comment-31308655-20181122031324

Mmm, 8/10.

Some things that would really help are making a new page for your epilogue and linking it to the main (NES Godzilla is one such pasta. It consists of many parts that are extremely long, think a 100 page fanfiction), and limiting use of 'children's words'. I mean, in sentences such as 'what the heck have I done', omit the implied explicit entirely, and just make it 'what have I done?' Swearing in stories, unless it helps develop the actual theme, characters or such, is really pointless and just ruins the tone.