Thread:Bruno Tattagllia/@comment-33395151-20190901012741/@comment-38729666-20190901020551

Well for starters take out the cliches like the blood, gore, contacting Disney Jr, adult party cartoon, vowing to never watch the show again etc take that all out. Write something completly unique, and make it sweet. Your biggest problem is the cliches take out them, and you'd be in the driver's seat.