Thread:Suomynona404/@comment-89.66.3.155-20170517072058/@comment-29417957-20170526212133

Thank you for the link. I have reviewed your story again, and I find it to still be very cliche.

Here are the cliches in your story:

1. A few characters become demonic and start randomly killing one another.

2. The dialouge is in Icelandic, which requires a translator to decipher.

3. The sentences that describe the murder in the play is not scary because it is simple writing  You need to add some scary details and use fancy writing.

The formatting and grammar is good, but you need to avoid typical Lost-Media cliches and come up with something more original.

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