Talk:Dora's Real Life/@comment-32960121-20181113141342

Ok so, the story and the idea are pretty good, the whole "it was all a fabtasy to escaoe real life" theme is actually pretty good in a Dora setting

The main 3 problems i have with this story are:

1. GRAMMAR: Some sentences while reading sounded wrong to me, also, the capitalization in some words that souldn't be capitalizated 2. TRANSLATION: i don't want to sound mean, but most of the spanish in here is awful, so, i know the author is not a spanish expert and i can't blame them for it, but when i was reading, some sentences only made sense or were correctly wrote in english, while in spanish it was gramatically incorrect, and had to read the english translation to actually understand it 3. BAD USE OF A GOOD IDEA: As i said, the idea of everything being imagination from Dora to escaoe her own decaying reality was interesting, but that's about it, it was bad ejecuted, and it was dropped sooner that i would like it in favor of mediocer gore and suicide cliche

The story is decent at best, but it was baddly ejecutated, has a couple of cliches and the spanish is very poor, it could have some improvement, but it's not utrerly garbage too! 6/10 is what it deserves in my opinion