Thread:Suomynona404/@comment-28730621-20171006183630/@comment-29417957-20171006192403

Your story failed to meet the Quality Standards.

Your story contains the typical overused cliches of all of the characters becoming evil, screaming in ALL CAPS, and killing each other.

Saying, "They died and their guts and blood flew everywhere" often fails as shock value. Creepypastas involve graphic violence for a mature audience; not ten year olds.

You also make numerous references to other works of media which fails to make the pasta serious and causes it to fall apart. People want to read a pasta; not references.

Your story also contains a serious plot issue. One, why did Nickelodean randomly send you a free DVD? Why would they send you a DVD with the banned episode on it?

I'm sorry, but your story does not even come close to being a decent pasta.

If you need help, here are some links:

Quality Standards

Style Guide for Writing

Writing Advice

How to Write Creepypasta

Overused Cliches

Writing Advice for Lost Episode Pastas.

Also, we admin are not trolls. We try to promote quality stories.



